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- From: Crawford_Kilian@mindlink.bc.ca (Crawford Kilian)
- Subject: Fiction Advice 11: Scenes
- Organization: MIND LINK! - British Columbia, Canada
- Date: Fri, 6 Nov 1992 04:28:07 GMT
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- Constructing a Scene
-
- The basic unit of fiction is not the sentence or the paragraph, but the
- scene. Every scene in a story has both a verbal and a nonverbal content. The
- verbal content may be a young man fervently courting a girl, or the President
- of the United States deciding whether to go ahead with a nuclear attack on a
- biological-warfare research center. The nonverbal content appears in the way
- you present the scene: You want your reader to think that the young man is
- touchingly awkward, or obnoxiously crude; that the president is a shallow
- twerp or a deeply sensitive man facing a terrible decision.
-
- In effect, you are like an attorney presenting a case to the jury: You supply
- the evidence, and the jury supplies the verdict. If *you* tell us that the
- young man is touchingly awkward, we may well disbelieve you. But if you show
- us his awkward behavior, and *we* say, "Aw, the poor lunk!"--then your scene
- has succeeded.
-
- Every scene presents a problem of some kind for one or more characters, and
- shows us how the characters deal with that problem. That, in turn, shows us
- something about the characters and moves the story ahead.
-
- Here's an exercise I've found useful with my fiction-writing students. I give
- them about 30 minutes to take the following elements to construct a scene
- that dramatizes the elements and leads to a decisive resolution:
-
- *A taxi and public-transit strike that's completely tied up downtown traffic
-
- *Donald Benson, a 35-year-old businessman: male chauvinist, aggressive
- personality, with business troubles
-
- *Helene Williams, his 22-year-old secretary: insecure in her new job, able to
- make friends easily, knows the city well
-
- *The need to get Donald to a hotel out at the airport to make a crucial
- presentation to a potential investor from Los Angeles; the investor will be
- flying out in four hours.
-
- Give yourself half an hour to write such a scene, so that the reader will
- finish it knowing all this information. I predict you'll be amazed at how
- quickly you can produce the scene, and at how it leads logically to another
- scene. The key is *knowing what you want to show your reader about your
- characters and their problems.* Once you know that, everything else follows
- pretty easily. So consider what's going on in your own story. What do you
- want your reader to think about your heroine? That she's shy but determined?
- That she thinks no man could ever love her? That she's perceptive about other
- women but baffled by men? Whatever those traits may be, you should be able to
- think of logical, plausible events that could force her to show them to us.
-
- In some cases, your plot will give you some automatic scenes. If your heroine
- is flying from New York to Frankfurt, maybe her seatmate is an attractive man
- who studiously ignores her; maybe the German customs people give her a hard
- time but she insists on her rights; maybe the heroine sees the attractive man
- greeted by a woman he seems to dote on even though the perceptive heroine can
- see the woman despises him. And so on.
-
- How long should a scene be? Long enough to make its point. A scene may run to
- just a sentence or two, or it may take up 20 pages. When it ends, we should
- know more about the characters involved, and their problems should have
- increased. This doesn't mean endlessly increasing gloom, but it means that
- even a success only clears the way for a more stressful scene to come. The
- hero may disarm the terrorist bomb in the daycare center, but the resulting
- publicity will make him a marked man; now the terrorists will try to kill him
- or his loved ones.
-
- How many characters should take part in a scene? As few as possible. Even a
- debate in Congress isn't going to involve every last representative. Here's a
- tip in this connection: If your plot demands a fairly large cast--for
- example, your protagonist is the commanding officer of an infantry platoon,
- or the headmistress of a girls' school--don't introduce a whole mob of
- characters at once. Bring in your protagonist first, in a scene that
- demonstrates the character's key traits (courage, leadership, self-hatred,
- whatever). Then bring in each of the supporting characters in a scene that
- lets him or her display key traits as well, while deepening our understanding
- of the protagonist and moving the plot along.
-
- This way we build up interest in the story by building up interest in the
- varied and complex characters. Tolkien does it in The Lord of the Rings;
- Kurosawa does it in Seven Samurai. Learn from the old masters!
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