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- From: nadeau@bnr.ca (Rheal Nadeau)
- Subject: Re: Semantics of "to be"
- Message-ID: <1992Oct7.170022.6141@bcrka451.bnr.ca>
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- Organization: Bell-Northern Research Ltd., Ottawa, Canada
- References: <16047@mindlink.bc.ca> <1992Oct6.152841.13733@bcrka451.bnr.ca> <1992Oct7.115201.11214@nocusuhs.nnmc.navy.mil>
- Date: Wed, 7 Oct 1992 17:00:22 GMT
- Lines: 47
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- In article <1992Oct7.115201.11214@nocusuhs.nnmc.navy.mil> yoshi@nocusuhs.nnmc.navy.mil (D M Yoshikami) writes:
- >In article <1992Oct6.152841.13733@bcrka451.bnr.ca> nadeau@bnr.ca (Rheal Nadeau) writes:
- >>
- >>Could you write this without "is"? How about:
- >> [more stuff omitted]
- >>Done as a quick exercise only - there is still room for improvement
- >>(uh, make that, these sentences could still be improved).
- > ^^^^^^^^^^
- >:-)
-
- Oops! :-)
-
- >>Now, the capital question - are my alternate versions really an
- >>improvement as far as the reader is concerned?
- >
- >Good question. This depends highly on the text involved and what the writer
- >was trying to say. We prefer active to passive voice simply because active
- >is clearer, more forceful, and, uh, active!! But this does not mean that the
- >passive voice does not have its importance: a writer or speaker may use it
- >intentionally when the subject isn't known, to highlight something other
- >than the subject, or to provide some intentional ambiguity. The author may
- >desire ambiguity -- I would guess that Federal Documents have this to
- >diffuse the blame :-) -- but whether that ambiguity is really necessary in
- >most cases, is arguable.
-
- One thing I realized while doing my little exercise - writing "to be"
- sentences is much easier - it's an undemanding structure. Avoiding "to
- be" made the writing much harder, because it removed much of the
- ambiguity inherent in the vaguer sentences. And bad writing showed up
- more clearly in the be-less statements, too. So "to be" can be an
- efficient shortcut, but like many shortcuts it can easily lead us into
- trouble . . .
-
- This reminds of the great "goto" debate in computer programming - it is
- generally believed that programs written without "goto" are "better"
- than those with. However, it is still quite possible to write very bad
- programs without "goto", and very good ones with "goto". The most that
- can be said is that "goto" make it easier to do sloppy programming (oh,
- I forgot this condition, OK, I'll just "goto" over-there and . . .).
-
- In the end, the key is thinking through what you want to say, then
- finding the words that best convey that messages. (And while the
- previous sentence uses "is", I doubt it would really be improved by
- trying to avoid that. Or: I doubt we could really improve it by
- trying to avoid that? :-) )
-
- The Rhealist - Rheal Nadeau - nadeau@bnr.ca - Speaking only for myself
-