Observation Essay Guidelines and Annotations

An observational paper
¥	clearly identifies the subject of the observation
¥	establishes the observation point from which the writer observes the subject
¥	uses objective statements to recreate a clear picture of the subject and to maintain an objective viewpoint
¥	uses accurate language
¥	organizes details in a way that makes sense
¥	gives an interpretation based on observations

Annotations

•	The subject is clearly identified. The reader knows that the essay is about Tooter, a cat, and can begin to imagine what he is like.
•	The writer establishes the observation point from which Tooter is observed. The writer observes Tooter one Saturday morning from across a room.
•	The writer uses objective details to recreate a clear picture of the subject and to maintain an objective viewpoint. Details include factual description; concrete, sensory language; and narration of events. Thoughts and feelings of the writer are not included.
•	The writer uses accurate language. Words such as "shiny, black fur," "silky soft" and "sharply pointed ears" give readers a clear picture of Tooter's appearance. Words such as "stretches" and "curls up" helps readers picture exactly what Tooter is doing.
•	The details are organized in a way that makes sense. The writer moves from near to far, focusing first on Tooter's appearance. The writer then moves to chronological, or time order.
•	The writer interprets what she observed. Tooter seems content with his life, even without much human companionship.