> Not an expert on the various brands she looked over each box separately.

{SD-Frank}: *imitating stupid ad voice* "Trojan Maaaaaannnnn!"

> Last night's experience with Toshi had hurt mainly because she was not excited, she considered that future encounters would continue along the same course and opted to get the lubricated brand.

[SD-Justy]: *to the screen* "Ukyo, get the ones stating -Ribbed for her pleasure."
{SD-Frank}: *Garth mode* "Ewwwww...."

>Eyeing the pack of condoms nervously, she looked around making sure no one was looking, she started walking to the cashier then stopped for a second and considered what she was doing.

{SD-Frank}: "Yeah, you're supposed to cover it up by buying something else like Low Fat Potato Chips, Q-Tips....or Soylent Green..."

>She turned around and returned to the selection and picked out a second box, these were lubricated as well butwere also ribbed. Maybe getting some enjoyment out of the situation would not hurt.

[SD-Justy]: "That's a good girl. Now go buy some French Ticklers."
{SD-Frank}: O_o

>She felt somewhat awkward as she approached the cashier and decided to buy a candy bar.

{SD-Frank}: "See? But candy's not a good cover-up..."

>She sucked at her lip and smiled at the cashier and waited anxiously as the cashier rang up her purchases. Ukyou was convinced that Ranma or Akane or even Ryouga would walk up behind her and ask her what she was buying.

{SD-Frank}: "If Ryouga popped in, that would be the absolute mother-f***er of all nosebleeds...probably flood Nerima..."
[SD-Justy]: "It would be even funnier if Ranma got a job working at the drugstore."

>Without comment the cashier rang up the two packs of condoms. When she came to the candy bar, she looked up at Ukyou and smirked.

{SD-Frank}: "Yeah, pre-marital candy bar-eating is quite a cause for concern, don't you think?"

> Blushing Ukyou paid the cashier and quickly walked out of the store. Buying the candy had made it too obvious she had never bought condoms before. Still the experience was behind her and she would be more prepared next time.

{SD-Frank}: "Told you...try the the Low Fat Potato Chips next time..."
[SD-Justy]: "Ring Dings and HoHos work for me."

> To her relief there had been no surprise visits by any of her "friends". She stuffed the condoms into her purse and continued walking down the street. She stepped into the home d╚cor store down the street. Several mirrors came immediately to her attention.

{SD-Frank}: "I'm starting to regret giving her that tip about mirrors..."
[SD-Justy]: "Ahh... I get it. She's hoping to find one where a horny Onna-Ranma nymphette will pop out."

> The sales person was nice and helped her pick out several inexpensive ones. She chose two plain wall mirrors for her room, one large ceiling mirror for over her bed and a more ornate fancy one for the restaurant.

{SD-Frank}: "Better not break em, or that's gonna be one hell of a bad luck streak...^_^"

>She arranged to have the two larger ones delivered the next day and have the store install them. The two smaller ones she took with her. Feeling content with her purchases she allowed her good feelings to show in her smile. After several hopeful smiles by passing men, Ukyou quickly returned to her wicked grin.

[SD-Justy]: *grandpa mode* "Ukyo got little Timmy...ate'im all up."
{SD-Frank}: "Yep, just like that woman in 'Species'...or was it 'Black Widow'?"

> Konatsu had done reasonably well in her absence and Ukyou decided not to clobber him with her spatula. The remainder of the day passed without incident as the evening crowd came and went. Leaving Konatsu to clean up, she retired upstairs to get ready.

{SD-Frank}: "Konatsu really should protest to get a raise...."
[SD-Justy]: "Yes. He should demand two beatings per day, that little masochist."

>She hung her two new mirrors in strategic locations around the room and stopped to stare at herself in one of them. Pulling up a chair from her desk she sat herself down in front of one and studied her reflection.

[SD-Justy]: "Come on... hurry up! Let's get to the masturbation scene."

> The first thing she noticed was the dark circles under her eyes. Make up would clear those up. She studied her eyes next. She noted that they had no sparkle or life, however she reasoned that the men she would meet would not be overly concerned with her eyes. Still a little life in them would not hurt.

{SD-Frank}: "Hey, I always look for the eyes in women...and my girlfriend has very cute eyes..."*sighs, zones out*
[SD-Justy]: *dumps a Sprite on Frank.* "Wake up."
{SD-Frank}: "Yechhh!"

> She practiced her smile noting the way her lips seemed a bit chapped and in need of some color. She chose her lipstick carefully perhaps a nice subdued red, garish colors did not mix well with her skin tone. As she studied herself in the mirror she became increasingly uncomfortable and hot. Unconsciously she began to rub her nipple.

[SD-Justy]: "How exactly does rubbing your nipple cool yourself down?"

> Lost in her contemplation she was unaware of how much time had passed.

{SD-Frank}: *looking at watch* "Well, about....twenty seconds by my watch...then again, I'm in a different time zone..^_^"

> Her lips moved silently, at first only mouthing the words, she repeated the same line continuously, her voice gaining strength and her hand rubbing her breast moved with greater abandon.
" I dream of you,
With my eyes open,
With my eyes closed,
In the day
In the night,
I dream of you,
Wherever you are,
Wherever I am,
In my heart,
In my soul,
I dream of you."

[SD-Justy]: "Ya know I have this feeling that this whole fic has been a vehicle for that poem."

> "Excuse me, Ukyou? I didn't quite hear what you said." Konatsu was at the door. Ukyou eyes went wide and she realized where her hand was, even now caressing her breast. Snarling she reached and grabbed her spatula, "Konatsu!" she screamed as she ran across the room her giant spatula upraised to strike him, "Don't you ever walk in on me again."

[SD-Justy]: "Hint -- Use a 'do not disturb - I'm friggin off' sign then all your problems will be solved."
{SD-Frank}: "Imminent supervisor abuse. Yep, Konatsu really should get into the union..."

>She brought the spatula down to bear on him with all her strength and stopped short of hitting him. She lowered her weapon, her anger dissipating. Konatsu had not even flinched. Sighing, she buttoned her top covering her exposed breast. "I'm sorry Konatsu, my door was open, it's not your fault."

[SD-Justy]: *Mr. Green mode* "Its a bit late for that!!!"

>Wordlessly, her turned to leave then stopped and turned around. "Ukyou," he began softly, "Would you like to go to a movie or something tonight?"

{SD-Frank}: "Wow. He just said it. None of this..'will you g...g...g...g..'stuff..."

>His question caught her off guard. Her eyes focused dangerously on him and he took a step back. "I'm sorry, maybe some other night," she lied, "I'm going out tonight." She slammed the door in his face.

[SD-Justy]: "What a bitch! Then again, he's no cucumber."
{SD-Frank}: "Re-JEC-ted!"

>She turned to look at herself in the mirror and realized that she hated the person she saw. Ukyou decided to not return to the same bar she had been to the night before. She had no desire to run into Toshi. She drank quietly for a while smiling at the passing men. Not long afterwards a bolder man offered to buy her a few more drinks.

[SD-Justy]: "Ukyo, you bar hopping slut!"
{SD-Frank}: "Good that he's bold. Those italicized men would probably be too fancy for her..."

> She had chosen her outfit carefully tonight. A black body suit top, and some dark leggings. It was a good look for her. She had made sure to cover up the dark circles and she even let her smile reach her eyes.

{SD-Frank}: "Ukyou in Speedos? O_o"
[SD-Justy]: "Well she should wear'em now before she's too bowlegged to look good in them."

> As he led her onto the dance floor she began move to the music, letting it control her. The alcohol removed her inhibitions and she let the music carry her body. She liked to dance and was good at it; her movements were always in synch with the rhythm, her body moving sexually against her partner. Before long her and Kentaro had attracted an audience, most entranced by her.

{SD-Frank}: "If that's Kentaro from Urusei Yatsura, I'm gonna heave..."
[SD-Justy]: "Little Kentaro, she's not only horny and loose, but desperate too!"

> Ukyou did not mind being the center of attention and she let her movements grow more hypnotic. Kentaro smiled at her and she smiled back but she had let some of the spark in her eyes fade. His smile faltered when her noticed her distracted vision. She quickly pressed her body against his grinding her hips against his and the self-assured smile quickly returned to his face.

[SD-Justy]: "I wonder if she's gonna have a threesome with Mrs. Ichonese?"
{SD-Frank}: "Vile Temptress! Again!"

>As the night wore on, Kentaro grow bolder, his lips often sought hers out, and he grew fond of running his fingers through her hair. By midnight, Kentaro was ready for more and he invited Ukyou outside.

[SD-Justy]: "Wanna ride in my Ch - evy loooove ma - cheen?"

> Once in the car they drove off to a secluded park and in the back seat Ukyou allowed him to fuck her. She was relieved that he did not seem to mind her insisting on the condom. It was a cold passionless exercise. Kentaro pumping madly and Ukyou laying still and hating him for what he was doing to her.

[SD-Justy]: "Little Kentaro's head bouncing up and down in the mirror."

> Kentaro lasted longer then Toshi, and as he came he grabbed her hair, pulling on it painfully. The lubrication on the condom had worn off and the latex left Ukyou feeling raw and sore once again.

[SD-Justy]: "Yeast infection will do that to ya."
{SD-Frank}: "Ick. I didn't _mean_ to hear that..."

>Wordlessly she refastened her body suit and pulled her leggings back on.. Kentaro lay on the back seat of his car breathing heavily. He smiled up at Ukyou and pulled his pants back on. "Leaving, huh?"

[SD-Justy]: "She sure is charitable giving away all those freebies. What happened to her business sense?"

> Ukyou nodded and reached for the door. She needed to get into the fresh air and breathe. The inside of the car was warm and musty and smelled of sex.

{SD-Frank}: *singing* "I smell sex in..the.."

> She felt like gagging on the smell. "Well, I didn't really expect you to stay." Kentaro smiled smugly at her. "Anyway, it was fun for a bit. Maybe I'll see you around." Ukyou stepped outside of the car and hurried off into the night without another word.

[SD-Justy]: "Ya know Ukyo, video games, knitting... sitting on a washing machine is better than that."

> Ukyou composed herself and stopped crying before she entered the restaurant. She realized that Konatsu was probably going to still be up waiting for her. While a part of her found his devotion sweet

{SD-Frank}: "Yes!"

> another part of her found it annoying.

{SD-Frank: "No!"
[SD-Justy]: "Put your bracer back on Frank, don't Pee Wee Herman here."
{SD-Frank}: *picks it up* Sorry 'bout that. ^_^

>Still she felt as if she could trust him not to go away. She needed some sense of stability in her life.
As expected, Konatsu was fast asleep at the counter. She poked him in the back and woke him up. "Hey sugar, I'm home you can stop worrying." Konatsu blinked furiously at her. "Ukyou, I'm so glad you're home." Ukyou shrugged, "It's been a long night, do you mind opening up tomorrow again."
"Of course not," Konatsu stood up and brushed the wrinkles out of his clothes, "You just sleep okay."
Ukyou smiled sweetly at him and promised herself to do something nice for him.

[SD-Justy]: "Yes, she could lace her spatula with liquid heat to make his next beating more enjoyable."

>"Good night Konatsu." She walked upstairs and went to sleep.

{SD-Frank}: "Did she curl herself into a basketball or racquetball or something again?"

*Screen fades to black*

{SD-Frank}: "Shucks, I'll never know now. ^_^ Anyway, onto the review.I didn't expect this to be as dark as I thought. The strengths of this were a very good sense of visualization (despite all my jokes ^_^) and great description. It also had some shock value, and in exploring a plausiblly delicate psychological situation involving Ukyou, it strengthened the moodof the chapter. The weakness of this work was probably development of other characters. I mean, if it should focus on Ukyou, that's what it needs to do, but I felt like the other characters were really also-rans, even Konatsu, and I would like to see more of the characters develop and interact with this "different" Ukyou as time goes on. It will end up strengthening the overall theme of the fic. A pretty good work for a first chapter - disturbing and dark, and while I'm not a big fan of darkfics I still think it was well written. Justy?"

[SD-Justy]: "No Nabiki, minus 10 points. Personally, I like humor in a Ranma fic this was totally devoid of it. I know its a darkfic, but some comic relief could have helped. However since its supposed to be dark, I won't let that factor affect my judgement. There was no explanation as to why Ukyo was doing what she was doing. Some internal debate, or a mental struggle could have cleared up her motives. It started doing it, then stopped. I didn't like the fact that she was just walking around like a sextoy. The mirror thing could have been explained better too. I did like the writing style, concise and easy to understand. It was also good at producing a mental image. If these criteria could be cleaned up a bit, then the rest of the fic should be enjoyable. I give it a C- .

{SD-Frank}: "See you next time..and don't forget...1 out of 10 people wish they had a bigger spatula to make huge-ass pancakes!"

[SD-Justy]: "Remember kids - bring your condoms when you eat at Ucchan's you may get lucky!"

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